Still looking for help.

Seeking Safety

By Janet Stobie

I’m still working on the “Pitch” for my new novel,  Seeking Safety.  For those of you who don’t know, “Pitch” is writer’s language for the words that go on the back cover of my book. These words need to catch the reader’s interest without giving away too much about the book. This pitch is a little long. I’ve incorporated the suggestions you have made from my last effort. Please consider making a comment. I need your help.  My questions for you my readers, and supporters are:

1. Does this pitch tweek your interest?

2. If you picked the book up in a bookstore, maybe because you liked the front cover, would reading this on the back cover push you toward buying the book?

Pitch for Seeking Safety by Janet Stobie  (sequel to Fireweed and also a stand alone novel).

Seventeen year-old Renée Grenville and her dad Steve are slowly rebuilding lives. Serena (Renée’s mom) was killed in a car crash two years ago. Now, Steve’s readiness for a new relationship threatens to topple Renée’s fragile security. While researching her mom’s past for a school project, Renée discovers a tiny book with faded writing. Serena’s great grandmother, a Barnardo child had kept a diary.

Renée and Steve’s lives are further complicated by the arrival of a refugee family in Catalpa Creek bringing joy and terror. Close friendships offer joy, sorrow and guilt to both Renée and her dad.

Seeking Safety is a coming of age novel, not just for Renée, but her Dad and the Catalpa Creek community.

 

4 thoughts on “Still looking for help.”

  1. Much more inviting. Specific details let me peek into the story to see if I’m interested in continuing.
    Sudden death of a loved one…her name introduces us to the main reason for the greif.
    Bernardo child…of historical interest and possibly a similar family situation.
    Refugees…is an emotional topic which is becoming a reality in our local communities

  2. A few more suggestions:
    . . . Renée discovers a tiny book with faded writing–her great-great grandmother’s diary.

    Renée and Steve experience joy and terror, sorrow and guilt when a refugee family arrives in Catalpa Creek. [I’m not sure this is exactly right, but use active voice when you can. I think the “Close friendships” sentence doesn’t add anything.]

  3. Again, thank you for your suggestions. It is still a work in progress. Yes Carol, I have a tendency to use passive voice for some reason. Thank you for reminding me. I included the close friendships line because there is a very critical event between friends. Of course, that reference is much two general. So I’ll think about that as well. Eventually I’ll get this pitch to a point where it is useful. I’m an optimist.

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